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[sour_idealist]

A question for you (read: flagrant begging for advice):

If a situation shifts from safe to dangerous in a matter of seconds (one sentence), and the narrative immediately starts in on an exceedingly close level of detail focused entirely on the source of the danger, does that convey that the POV character's moment of shock and subsequent massive adrenaline rush (in a circumstance when they can't actually either run or fight back)? Or does it just completely kill any kind of pacing or tension?

(It's being told in close third-person singular, a.k.a the way I write everything apparently, if that matters.)

Comments

[wake-the-dragon.livejournal.com]

I think it depends on the level and kind of danger. For example, if it's a suprise attack, I can see the quick swith of narration to the danger.

[pleonasm]

I think it can be done well and it can be done badly, and probably the best idea is to write the scene and then see if it drags to you or others.

/completely unhelpful